My favorite page yet!! I must hurry and get to work on the next pages so I can catch up to this page! ;w;

posted by sarall on 27 Sep 2009 08:19 pm

Hmm... The transition between Hunter finding Pyro behind him and being scared the next second is a bit too fast. Next time, you may want to include a small panel with a close-up to his eye with a flicker of surprise.
But, yes, I do like this page as well.

posted by RockXIII on 03 Oct 2009 11:22 am

I disagree, Rock. If I were to add a small panel like that it wouldn't flow as smoothly from what I'm picturing. It's feel like way too much of a pause, even if it was really small.

posted by Hunterkirizaki on 05 Oct 2009 03:15 pm

Just to add to Hunter's comment, I think he realized in panel 2 who was behind him, so he wouldn't have needed a moment between panel 3 and 4 to be surprised. There may be occasions in the future where such a panel will be necessary though, so thanks for the feedback.

posted by sentiashinou on 06 Oct 2009 11:58 am